So I'm making a profile for a scholarship site . . . (1 Viewer)

[Areum]

I need to know if this is enough

Grammarly said it was ok

@kuromie @SunnyYeonnie @babybloo @Mingchuu @Yili @WinterFlower @Vikki @OnlyCalB @litc @Soogi @Tsukino @Exi @Reverie @lexus​

 

[ChiaraStar169]

looks cool

 

[Yili]

I think it's really good! Maybe the only thing I would suggest is changing the DP to something different? Do you have a semi current picture you had to take for yearbook or class pictures? Anything looking a bit more official I don't know how they feel about selfies for professional/scholarly applications like this

 

[litc]

I need to know if this is enough

Grammarly said it was ok

@kuromie @SunnyYeonnie @babybloo @Mingchuu @Yili @WinterFlower @Vikki @OnlyCalB @litc @Soogi @Tsukino @Exi @Reverie @lexus​

I think it’s good!

 

[Exi]

I need to know if this is enough

Grammarly said it was ok

@kuromie @SunnyYeonnie @babybloo @Mingchuu @Yili @WinterFlower @Vikki @OnlyCalB @litc @Soogi @Tsukino @Exi @Reverie @lexus​

fam you might want to cover draw over your pic for security reasons for this thread
other than it seems okay. :O

 

[Areum]

I think it's really good! Maybe the only thing I would suggest is changing the DP to something different? Do you have a semi current picture you had to take for yearbook or class pictures? Anything looking a bit more official I don't know how they feel about selfies for professional/scholarly applications like this

Ah you're right!! I didn't even think about that!! (that's my google account pfp lol)

 

[Areum]

fam you might want to cover draw over your pic for security reasons

I've reveled myself before, I'm fine lol

 

[Areum]

I think it's really good! Maybe the only thing I would suggest is changing the DP to something different? Do you have a semi current picture you had to take for yearbook or class pictures? Anything looking a bit more official I don't know how they feel about selfies for professional/scholarly applications like this

I feel like this one's better (sorry for the quality lol the screenshot's blurry)

 

[Yili]

I feel like this one's better (sorry for the quality lol the screenshot's blurry)

it looks good!! cutie pie~

 

[Areum]

it looks good!! cutie pie~

I honestly think my yearbook pic for this year was crap but I'm glad someone likes it

 

[Juniverse]

I think you did a great job I hope you get a scholarship

 

[Areum]

I think you did a great job I hope you get a scholarship

Thank you!!

 

[ADORA]

You did an amazing job on it
It's really written professionally
Hope you really get the scholarship sis

 

[Areum]

You did an amazing job on it
It's really written professionally
Hope you really get the scholarship sis

Thanks a bunch sis!! Me too, this whole process is nerve wracking

 

[athenaaa]

I really hope you get it!! As already suggested, the profile picture change was good. No spelling errors but to make it sound more professional I’d avoid contractions like “wasn’t”. Other than that it sounds good.

 

[Areum]

I really hope you get it!! As already suggested, the profile picture change was good. No spelling errors but to make it sound more professional I’d avoid contractions like “wasn’t”. Other than that it sounds good.

Changed! Thanks Winter!!

 

[athenaaa]

Changed! Thanks Winter!!

No problem!! Really hoping the best for you

 

[ADORA]

Thanks a bunch sis!! Me too, this whole process is nerve wracking

No problem fingers crossed 🤞🏻

 

[eclipsoul]

there is one sentence that says "the time i shared with them my dreams for the future" and it seems like there is a word missing between "them" and "my"? or maybe i'm reading that wrong because english is not my first language. other than that i think it's very well written, i hope everything goes well for you

 

[Villains]

you did a good job. i hope you get the scholarship