Fanfiction A Little Wicked 🩸| A Team Gryffindor Story (1 Viewer)

[litc]

TRIGGER WARNINGS: blood, alcohol, swearing

Now I'm interested

I will read all of it later

 

[litc]

Is it smth between 3rd person limited omniscient centered on Tzuyu, and 3rd person omniscient?

 

[Boyo]

Is it smth between 3rd person limited omniscient centered on Tzuyu, and 3rd person omniscient?

You could say. But it's more like I didn't pay enough attention to the narrative details, plus my bad English.

 

[litc]

You could say. But it's more like I didn't pay enough attention to the narrative details, plus my bad English.

Nah, I was just wondering

you wrote it by yourself?

 

[Boyo]

Nah, I was just wondering

you wrote it by yourself?

Yes, made me sleepless for 2 days.

 

[litc]

Yes, made me sleepless for 2 days.

Good job

I didn’t finish it yet, just was wondering abt the pov

rlly like the premise and the detail!

waiting for the swearing

I should be looking for differences for ravenclaw

 

[Boyo]

Good job

I didn’t finish it yet, just was wondering abt the pov

rlly like the premise and the detail!

waiting for the swearing

I should be looking for differences for ravenclaw

Thank you. I'm not satisfied with it, because I can't express myself in English and well, writing is hard.
The swearing is one shit and one fu-

 

[litc]

Thank you. I'm not satisfied with it, because I can't express myself in English and well, writing is hard.
The swearing is one shit and one fu-

Well it’s not your first language so ofc, I’m sure you can write even better like that

I think I could only write a story in English

 

[litc]

Ok @Hakunama_Tata I finished it finally!

I really liked it! This reimagining was both really interesting and creative

The way you ended it, the last lines were perfect. It really picked up in later chapters

The backstory was unexpected but not unbelievable (what I mean, is sometimes stories aren't predictable, but it's not a good thing, it's cuz things don't make sense and were just put for the sole purpose of not having a predictable storyline, many movies like this, I'm not wording well, but it's a good thing) and the build up was nice! The plot was good, and Tzuyu's actions (rejecting going to the dark world, confronting felix but only in broad daylight, wondering if she's remembering or dreaming, etc.) were realistic

The chapter breakup and progression and your use of adjectives were really nice as well

Really, it was really good, I can tell how hard you worked on it, I hope you keep writing
You'll get more confident too!

If I give one criticism, it's that Lisa's character was unnecessary

 

[litc]

Ok @Hakunama_Tata I finished it finally!

I really liked it! This reimagining was both really interesting and creative

The way you ended it, the last lines were perfect. It really picked up in later chapters

The backstory was unexpected but not unbelievable (what I mean, is sometimes stories aren't predictable, but it's not a good thing, it's cuz things don't make sense and were just put for the sole purpose of not having a predictable storyline, many movies like this, I'm not wording well, but it's a good thing) and the build up was nice! The plot was good, and Tzuyu's actions (rejecting going to the dark world, confronting felix but only in broad daylight, wondering if she's remembering or dreaming, etc.) were realistic

The chapter breakup and progression and your use of adjectives were really nice as well

Really, it was really good, I can tell how hard you worked on it, I hope you keep writing
You'll get more confident too!

If I give one criticism, it's that Lisa's character was unnecessary

If I'm allowed to vote, I think I'll vote for Gryffindor for this one

 

[Magician]

Ok @Hakunama_Tata I finished it finally!

I really liked it! This reimagining was both really interesting and creative

The way you ended it, the last lines were perfect. It really picked up in later chapters

The backstory was unexpected but not unbelievable (what I mean, is sometimes stories aren't predictable, but it's not a good thing, it's cuz things don't make sense and were just put for the sole purpose of not having a predictable storyline, many movies like this, I'm not wording well, but it's a good thing) and the build up was nice! The plot was good, and Tzuyu's actions (rejecting going to the dark world, confronting felix but only in broad daylight, wondering if she's remembering or dreaming, etc.) were realistic

The chapter breakup and progression and your use of adjectives were really nice as well

Really, it was really good, I can tell how hard you worked on it, I hope you keep writing
You'll get more confident too!

If I give one criticism, it's that Lisa's character was unnecessary

Thank you!!
I hope you also appreciate my graphics

 

[Boyo]

Ok @Hakunama_Tata I finished it finally!

I really liked it! This reimagining was both really interesting and creative

The way you ended it, the last lines were perfect. It really picked up in later chapters

The backstory was unexpected but not unbelievable (what I mean, is sometimes stories aren't predictable, but it's not a good thing, it's cuz things don't make sense and were just put for the sole purpose of not having a predictable storyline, many movies like this, I'm not wording well, but it's a good thing) and the build up was nice! The plot was good, and Tzuyu's actions (rejecting going to the dark world, confronting felix but only in broad daylight, wondering if she's remembering or dreaming, etc.) were realistic

The chapter breakup and progression and your use of adjectives were really nice as well

Really, it was really good, I can tell how hard you worked on it, I hope you keep writing
You'll get more confident too!

If I give one criticism, it's that Lisa's character was unnecessary

Thank you for the detailed review and putting your time into it.
We really appreciate it.
Also, thank you for the kind words!
I don’t think that I will keep writing tbh, it was like one of a kind to me.
And I also agree, Lisa‘s character was totally unnecessary.

 

[litc]

Thank you!!
I hope you also appreciate my graphics

Yes, this one was my fave!

Tbh I thought you would write the story bc you like reading