I have written a first short text, can you tell me what you think? (1 Viewer)

[Willow]

That might be good too, especially if any parts will be really relevant later or if they show what her current environment is now to contrast more with the new world.

Good idea

 

[Wingfrost]

I really like it.
My only suggestion is possibly explain her surroundings just a bit more than saying she’s at a library or a cafe, like explain the weather a little, or sounds and smells around her, etc…

 

[Willow]

I really like it.
My only suggestion is possibly explain her surroundings just a bit more than saying she’s at a library or a cafe, like explain the weather a little, or sounds and smells around her, etc…

good ideas